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I have recently become an Ann Summers rep/party planner in the Bristol (UK) area and I want to place a advert in a local paper, I’ve come up with a few ideas but I’m not sure if they are any good or what one to use, can you have a look and tell me which one looks the best, or give me a sample of one you think would work better. Thank you 1,ANN SUMMERS PARTIES!!Book the ultimate ladies night in. which is full of games laughter and fun!! Mention this ad when booking and you will recieve a extra 5% discount off any item in the catalogue or a free gift. I will also bring along a bottle of wine to get your party started! Contact Tone in, Bristol, on no ********** or e-mail me at ************ 2,FREE ANN Summers Christmas Party. The ultimate girls night in for you and your friends. Great fun, fantastic Christmas catalogue and lots of gifts and prizes!! Call Tone now to request a catalogue, book your party or place an order on ***. book before 20/10/07 to get a free gift or 5% discount

Public Comments

1. They look ok to me. The only thing is One(?) bottle of wine. Won't go far if 20 turn up. I would leave it out. Wish I could come but I am male and old..... :-(
2. Lovely! How can I order?
3. The second one sounds better. Good luck.
4. i like them both but number 2 sounds like u only do christmas parties
5. The adverts are OK. Which newspaper to put it in is important. I know someone who placed an advert and it got put in the wrong paper. It was farther away and a much wealthier area - the jobs and money rolled in. Think about the type of people who are likely to respond - not too posh for Ann Summers I would have thought - but not down market either.
6. Yea the first one but tell them also to bring drink.I would love to come hee hee.Hope it works out for you good luck. :)
7. 2 sounds better - price comes at the end when people are eager to see more - just remove the free from the beginning - it is somehow in contradiction with 'discount' at the end. my suggestion:The ultimate girls night - Ann Summers Christmas Party. (optional: For you and your friends.) Great fun, fantastic Christmas catalogue and lots of gifts and prizes!! Call Tone now to request a catalogue, book your party or place an order on ***. book before 20/10/07 to get 5% discount or a FREE gift
8. As a person who has written copy for radio ads I like the 2nd one better. I don't know that you need the word FREE in there , I would capatalize the ANN SUMMERS CHRISTMAS PARTY. The wording you use is good, and you have created urgency with putting a time limit when the gift or discount is available. I don't know how the laws work in the UK, but here in Canada it would be real iffy to put something in about drinking alchohol because of the liability you could incur if someone got involved in a DUI after they left the party.
9. I went to university in Bristol and know there is a strong market for Ann Summer's evenings. There is also a lot of demand! If i was you, i would capitalise on the university semester just starting and get a few adverts in their student union magazines - Very cheap to advertise and have a good reach to one of your possible target markets. You also need to remember that only two weeks ago, the majority of the students just received their student loans so therefore will have that little bit extra of disposable income to spend! Furthermore, get advertising on websites such as gumtree.com! again, low in cost (in fact free) and has a very wide spread! I prefer the second advert you have written. Good luck!